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Focus Group

The Obsidian Path - Act I Pacing

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Marcus Vane

MA
Maya
CO
Colton
DE
Devon
Now Discussing: Emotional stakes in the subway confrontation scene
MA

I felt like Elias reacted too calmly here. For a man who just lost his sister, the dialogue felt a bit clinical. I wanted more raw anger.

14:22:04

Hard disagree. The clinical tone shows his shock. He's compartmentalizing. It makes the explosion in the next scene more earned.

14:22:48
CO
DE

Colton has a point, but the pacing does dip slightly during the monologue. Maybe tighten the middle beats?

14:23:15
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